Can you just listen to me?
Listen to me and not speak
Not give me any advice
just listen, and keep mum.
I know that your fountain
of wisdom is full of pearls
for everyone you ever meet
but listen, do not speak.
I know I should be positive
and maybe my sorrow is small
maybe i do overthink
but listen, don't tell me this.
Keep your face free of scepticism
don't give me exasperated sighs
or 'everything-will-be-fine's
be attentive, don't talk.
Dont mock my misery
in front of other people
do not tell them of my sadness
keep it to yourself, hush.
The walls i have built
do not allow me to get too personal
but I have now done it
please dont give me regret.
Listen to me and not speak
Not give me any advice
just listen, and keep mum.
I know that your fountain
of wisdom is full of pearls
for everyone you ever meet
but listen, do not speak.
I know I should be positive
and maybe my sorrow is small
maybe i do overthink
but listen, don't tell me this.
Keep your face free of scepticism
don't give me exasperated sighs
or 'everything-will-be-fine's
be attentive, don't talk.
Dont mock my misery
in front of other people
do not tell them of my sadness
keep it to yourself, hush.
The walls i have built
do not allow me to get too personal
but I have now done it
please dont give me regret.
I don't know how you take criticism, but I just had to say this.
ReplyDelete"Keep your face free of scepticism
don't give me exasperated sighs"
These 2 lines just don't go with the rest of the lines. Not content wise, but flow wise. Maybe simpler words would have helped.
Otherwise, it's great. And yes, sometimes we just need someone to listen intently, without saying anything. Patience to understand what we say and reciprocate in silence.
Yeah. Perhaps the mentioned lines do sound a bit heavy. Will keep that in mind.
DeleteThanks. :)
Amazing :)
ReplyDeleteLacked the flow in a couple of places but was still commendable.